We were the sailing the ocean on my big beautiful boat when the waves started to cover the dock of my boat it kept creeping up,
Then all of a sudden the water all disappeared and the boat was beginning to fall plunge down to the bottom of the ocean.
BANG!!! The boat crashed into the sandy damp water still wet from the water that once lay there.
everyone in my crew was alive but we had no idea what to do.
Everything looked normal it was as if there was never anything here but just a desert with wet sand.
We decided to just walk into one general direction and attempt to find land,
If there was any...
Kia ora Liam. Great work using description and detail to build visual imagery in the readers mind and using some great vocab to add sopistication to your writing (plunge, damp). Keep pushing it with your vocabulary choices and consider each word - 'is it the best possible word to get across the most meaning?'. A great ending that keeps the audience wondering. Great work.
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