I stepped off the train onto what seemed to be a dirty mossy cracked stone brick hanging in the air,
next to a path that leads into a random overgrown cave.
I entered into it the darkness of the cave engulfed my body, instantly making me shiver down my spine and out my legs.
a voice spoke out to me telling me to get out of this place.
I did exactly that but there was nowhere I could go but back into the train...
It was still there not moving at all, it was as if it were waiting for me.
I stepped inside and sat down, Instantly the train shot forwards , I hoped tat it was going back down to earth not to some random creepy weird place in space.
5 hours later we stopped and there was a ringing sound in my head and sheets tucked over my bed.
ps. the whole thing was a dream.
Hi Liam, just been enjoying this piece of writing. Loved the different choice of words, the suspense created and the ending....Please blog more of your great writing, I've nearly run out of library books.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Liam. Another great addition to your writing bank. Some great vocab in there - engulfed, overgrown, shiver. Are you using a thesaurus when you write? I really love exploring voabulary that adds so much detail with just one word e.g. you could have said 'the darkness of the cave was around me' but by using 'the darkness of the cave engulfed me' you added sophistication and a real sense of drama. Awesome! Like Mr P, I look forward to more of your work.
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